Ever More - Comments

Seriously, I adore this story.
Chapter 7 ended on such a cliff-hanger!! XDD

wHAT, HE LEFT?!
OK, I usually don't read werewolf AUs, in fact I detest them with a passion because they're done horribly wrong way too often. However, this isn't half bad, I'm enjoying it, oddly enough. I have found numerous grammatical errors, but the general plot and fluency is respectable. ^w^ I'd give this a 7/10 because of fluency and the presence of realistic character actions and reactions, but it's missing one point for grammar, one point for the feeling of the story being rushed, and a third point for the very sudden sex scene. I'm not complaining, it was done well, but again, there was no substantial buildup to it. I don't mean for you to change your writing style drastically, but adopting a few new techniques would improve this story a lot!
I anticipate the next chapter!
-Faith/WE